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Scottswoman's Balad

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'Twas in the time of autumn when
The geese all flew in V's
My eyes beheld a maiden fair
'A sitting in the reeds
And as I gazed upon this beauty
Sitting in the grass
I wanted her although I knew
She was somebody's lass

She came across the sea with
Her lover from the south
And it ran a knife through me each time
He'd kiss her on the mouth
For he ne'er did deserve her
Beat her spirit ruthlessly
And I knew that she could be
Much happier with me

I saw her walking home one night
As drunk as she could be
And she could barely stand
And so I took her home with me
She told me that she loved us both
But still she wanted him
And that whate'er he asked of her
She always would give in

She said she wanted more to drink
And so I filled her glass
She said, "My dear, I need you near,
"But I'll always be his lass."
So the next night as they both slept
I took me mother's knife
And with one cut I drained his blood
And quickly took his life

My maiden fair was not aware
Of what I'd done that night
And in her grief she ran to me
And I made her my wife
Now that her Englishman was dead
Her love to me she'd give
Until the day I realized
Without him she couldn't live

And so that night while I did sleep
She took me mother's knife
And with one cut she drained her blood
And quickly took her life
Guess there's no rhyme or reason why
A lass loves who she loves
Or why she'd follow him to Hell
When she could be with me above

I guess this good Lord saw it fit
This be my punishment
And in the end he's going to make you
Pay for all your sins
A love triangle between an Englishman, an Irishman, and a Scottswoman always makes for good drama.

I wrote this the day after I went to the 4 Shillings Short concert. I meant to write it in sonnet form, but that didn't work out. I don't know what my problem is with sonnets lately. I've tried to write two sonnet cycles and gave up on both because I couldn't stand them, and you know how much I hate not to finish a poem.

Anyway, melodrama aside, I really like the flow of this poem. Let me know what you think.
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wh0rem0ans's avatar
I like this. I would move the word 'you' from the second to last line and use it to begin the last line. Lovely work.